If you compared the rough draft of my vampire story “Hunted Under the Light of the Moon,” you know what happens in this story and can see that ChatGPT’s version of Chapter 1 doesn’t deviate very much when it comes to the initial encounter between Jonas and Darius. I wish I could say that this was the case for the rest of the chapters but I would be lying. ChatGPT’s chapters 2 and 3 of “Hunted Under the Light of the Moon” deviates from my story
How badly? Read the next two chapters and I’ll tell you afterwards.
Chapter 2: The River
As Jonas jogged through the forest, trying to come up with a plan to outsmart Darius, he became aware of the sound of rustling leaves and snapping twigs behind him. Darius was already on his tail, and Jonas knew he had to do something fast.
That’s when he had an idea. The river was nearby, and if he could reach it, he might be able to use the water to mask his scent and throw Darius off his trail. It was risky, but it was his only chance.
Pouring on the speed, Jonas raced through the forest, dodging trees and leaping over fallen branches. He could feel Darius closing in on him, and he knew he had to be careful. One wrong move, and it would all be over.
As he reached the river, Jonas paused for a moment to catch his breath. The water was cold and clear, and Jonas could see the moon reflected in its surface. It was a beautiful sight, but Jonas had no time to appreciate it. He had to keep moving.
Taking a deep breath, Jonas plunged into the river and started to swim downstream. The water was icy cold, and Jonas could feel his muscles protesting as he struggled to keep his head above water. But he didn’t let that stop him. He had to keep going, no matter what.
As he swam, Jonas could feel Darius’s presence behind him. He could sense the hunter’s eyes on him, watching his every move. But Jonas refused to give up. He had to keep moving, no matter what.
Finally, after what felt like an eternity, Jonas reached the other side of the river. He crawled out of the water, shaking and exhausted, but alive.
He had made it. He had outsmarted Darius, at least for now. But he knew that the hunter would be back, and he had to be ready. He had to come up with a new plan, and fast.
With a determined look in his eye, Jonas set off into the forest, ready to face whatever lay ahead.
Chapter 3: The Cabin
As the night wore on, Jonas continued to run through the forest, trying to stay one step ahead of Darius. He knew that the hunter was always on his tail, waiting for the right moment to strike. But Jonas refused to give up. He was determined to survive, no matter what.
As dawn approached, Jonas began to feel the effects of his long run. His muscles were sore and his head was throbbing, but he refused to slow down. He had to keep moving, no matter what.
Finally, as the sky began to lighten, Jonas spotted a small cabin in the distance. It was a ramshackle old thing, with peeling paint and a sagging roof, but to Jonas it looked like a sanctuary. He knew he had to make it there before Darius caught up to him.
Pouring on the speed, Jonas raced towards the cabin. He could feel Darius closing in on him, and he knew he had to be careful. One wrong move, and it would all be over.
As he reached the cabin, Jonas flung himself inside and locked the door behind him. He was safe, at least for now.
Panting and exhausted, Jonas collapsed on the floor and allowed himself a moment to rest. He had made it through the night, but he knew that the hunt was far from over. Darius would be back, and he had to be ready.
As he sat there, trying to catch his breath, Jonas heard a noise outside the cabin. It was a low growl, like an animal, and it sent a shiver down Jonas’s spine.
He knew what it was. It was Darius, trying to get in.
Grimly, Jonas got to his feet and prepared to face his hunter one last time. He knew that this was the final showdown, and he had to be ready.
Right at the very start of Chapter 2 I noticed that ChatGPT seemed to forget that Darius had given Jonas a 90-minute head start. My guess is that the chatbot wanted to keep the suspense and action going by having Jonas being chased by Darius from the start? Then there is the river that Jonas crosses which is not in my story. Making the scene more about Man vs Nature for the chapter. Again, it seems like the ChatGPT is just trying to keep the reader’s interest the easiest way possible. However, the chatbot also gives Jonas an advantage in that he seems to know the layout of the area. Which is something that I didn’t give Jonas in my version. Either that, or ChatGPT failed to properly convey to the reader that Jonas noticed signs that there was a river nearby.
There is also no calculated or logical deliberation on the part of Jonas. He seems more to be acting out of instinct spurred on by fear. Unable to rein in his emotions and be rational in his actions and deliberations. ChatGPT’s version of Jonas is not the same one I have envisioned in my mind for this story.
For chapter 3, ChatGPT added another element to the story by the inclusion of a cabin. Not to mention that, once again, no mention of the head start that Jonas was given. Rather, the chatbot continues to try and keep up the suspense by saying that Darius is still hot on Jonas’ trail. Then there is the issue that this version of Jonas runs until he can no longer run. Tiring himself out before there is a fight. Which is not what the Jonas in my story would have done. He knows that there is going to be a fight no matter what, so it would make no sense to him to tire himself out by just running as far and as fast as possible.
All-in=all, I really don’t like the direction ChatGPT took the story. In fact, it feels too much like Richard Connell’s “The Most Dangerous Game” which is an inspiration for “Hunted Under the Light of the Moon.”
But what do you think about ChatGPT’s version of the story compared to mine? Does the addition of barriers such as the river and cabin make sense or has the potential to improve the story if I include one or both elements in my story?
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